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Sara\'s First Trip to a Sex Toy Shop
Author: Donya
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(Added on Nov 13, 2010)
(This month 52728 readers) (Total 66673 readers) |
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Sara makes her first trip to a sex toy shop and meets the owners who help her decide what toys she likes. |
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
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Dec 18, 2010 |
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I loved this story, but there were a few things stoped it being a 10, the chidish reference to Ariel as Miss Ariel at the opening of sentences in the descriptive text and the lack of descritions of the proprietors, I got the impression Miss Ariel was in her thirties and the man a slimeball in his forties preying on vulnerble shy mid twenties girls but maybe ch 2 will be 10.
I'll look out for it. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
tjlewis132
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Nov 18, 2010 |
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Pleasant little tale that can stand on its own or continue with additional chapters. Light BDSM without going over the edge, more on the soft core side. A solid nine at this point by my account. J LEWIS (9/10) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
donya_0803
(Edit) (Nov 19, 2010)
- Very soft core, yes. Thanks for reading & thanks for the review, J.
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Nov 15, 2010 |
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Liked the story, though to me it often comes across as a tad forced. Bereft of some deeper feelings too.
Very nice descriptions and all, yes, but somehow, the way things are presented, I couldn't seem to care for Sara.
In comparison with Donya's earlier work (which I saw I have to re-review again --will happen asap) "Sara's First Trip..." is passable. Passable in the sense that "The Storm", "Why Are You Here?" and "Her Punishment " were each outstanding. "Sara" is 'just' good.
JJ (8/10)
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- Replied by:
donya_0803
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2010)
- Thanks, JJ. Not sure why the other stories aren't linked to this one, or why the other comments I had disappeared...but thanks for the comment. Very perceptive...The other stories I wrote were....inspired...this one was shear fiction. I'm surprised it's that obvious. Thanks again for reading.
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JimmyJump
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2010)
- Thanks for the reply, Donya. I appreciate it when an author takes the time to respond to reviews.
I somehow had a feeling that your other stories were 'closer to home', so to speak...
The reason why most comments have disappeared (and why your accounts aren't connected) is because the server had two major crashes in one year (the first on December 16, 2009, the second a couple of months ago), setting back the additions several months.
Torq has been sweating on both accounts to re-upload the missing stories. For some reason, there's only back-ups of the stories, not of the comments...
But, since it's been a while that I've read your other stories and because I know they were (are) good, it will be a pleasure to get re-aquainted and subsequently give praise to their author. As long as you promise to keep your feet on the ground. Else you might float off into the nearest wilderness and we won't be able to read the great stories you still have to write... *grin*
JJ
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| Reviewer:
farside757
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Nov 14, 2010 |
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More stories please. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
donya_0803
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2010)
- Thanks for your note, farside. I actually have 3 other stories posted on here under author name donya_0803. They are 'Her Punishment', 'Why Are You Here?' and 'The Storm'. Thanks for reading.
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Nov 14, 2010 |
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Great story. The only snag is i think Sara is going to find playing by herself with her toys a little disappointing. Pity that, the only way out of the problem is for her to visit the shop more often and Donya had better write about every visit or she wil have some frustrated readers :-) (10/10)
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- Replied by:
donya_0803
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2010)
- Thanks for the review, Dryhill. Yes, I agree Sara is liable to be disapointed...which will likely keep Donya very busy.
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| Reviewer:
dragonfly996
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Nov 14, 2010 |
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Great start, can't wait for the next trip and the new toys... Thanks (10/10)
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- Replied by:
donya_0803
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2010)
- Thanks for reading, dragonfly...and especially thanks for the review. Much appreciated.
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