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hole Control
Author: Caine.Paine
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(Added on May 2, 2010)
(This month 93938 readers) (Total 129113 readers) |
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Abducted and caged, "hole" has no choice but to adapt to her newly and profoundly debased status as a sex slave. Pain, humiliation, and fear will force her to become the consummate fucktoy her twisted Owner desires. |
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Tenochtitlan
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Nov 26, 2014 |
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Very good. Needs another chapter. (10/10)
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sockslut
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Nov 9, 2010 |
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Deviously sadistic. Well written. A very good read. (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jun 22, 2010 |
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I had been wondering what happened to this story. Clearly it was swept away Tsunami-wise when the server decided to get highly uncooperative last december.
Am glad that Caine.Paine took this opportunity to weed out some minor technicalities of which I pointed out a few on my first review (like hole becoming more perfect everyday).
I must say that Caine.Paine did more than just a little weeding, because there's been done some extensive seeding/planting as well, making "hole Control" a far more enjoyable read than at the first upload.
far more enjoyable because more attention was paid to the writing, giving the story a 'fuller' sense, adding more flesh to the bones.
The conclusion is that instead of 'looking' like a starving model, "hole Control" now has the 'feel' of a hot-blooded chikadee presenting the latest bikini fashion.
The style in which the tale is written is also well done. The intimate yet detatched feel thanks to the way the owner handles his possession. Like, well, an owner treats his pet, really. Loving and caring, but not like you would for a human being.
Great stuff.
JJ (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
coyote3k
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May 16, 2010 |
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Thanks for writing this story, I've really enjoyed it! I sometimes find myself getting bored and skipping some of the beginning of abduction/slave training stories but I love the way you jump between past and present. It gets to some action when it needs it and still tells the whole story. Great work, please continue writing :) (10/10)
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grinner666
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May 9, 2010 |
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Did you do a major rewrite since the last time this story appeared here, or am I just becoming a real softy in my old age? Because this is an excellent piece of work where before I mainly remember being annoyed by the story, the "I'm so superior" attitude of the narrator, just about everything about it. That is certainly no longer the case.
ONE criticism, and it's a minor one; not capitalizing hole's "name" in most cases is fine ... the narrator is marginalizing her, and that works. However, when you fail to capitalize at the beginning of a sentence, or worse yet, a paragraph, it stops being significant and amusing, and starts just being annoying. But as I said, it's a minor criticism at worst. (9/10)
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bredmilker
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May 5, 2010 |
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very well written and thought out, best I have read here by far (10/10)
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Eponine
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May 4, 2010 |
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The word that continually came to mind as i read this story is "Perfect".
Superb content presented superbly.
The story is delivered in the cool and refined manner the master delivers his training to hole. When a writer can fluidly use "olfactory nerve" in a piece of erotica, i am in grateful awe, overcome by intellectual orgasm and sexual in one.
At the end of the final part, i was left as desperate for more as hole was for sexual release.
THANK YOU, Caine.Paine, from a humble reader and a now completely humbled writer. (10/10)
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Dryhill
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May 4, 2010 |
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i do not really like abduction stories, but this one is told in a convincing manner. The Abbductor/Master is quiet believeable as an evil sadistic maniac who should be locked away. The girl is well portrayed as a confused and frightened young lady who is reluctantly doing what she is told in the hope of getting free. The slow pace of the story well captures suspense and menace. Well done. (8/10)
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strangefruit
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May 4, 2010 |
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Very well-written.Suspenseful, not rushed, great build-up, just the right amount of detail and description. (9/10)
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