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The Different Business Trip
Author: Machine23
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(Added on Sep 19, 2007)
(This month 65816 readers) (Total 99651 readers) |
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It's inspired mainly by two stories in the www "A Year of Slavery" and "The Breaking of Dan Newman", So if you find any parrallels, it is intended to be. |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Mar 8, 2008 |
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To many areas for improvement no real plot and too jumpy making this story hard to read or follow, (2/10)
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mkemse
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Sep 23, 2007 |
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to many areas of improvement needed to list here. just did nothing for me sorry (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Sep 19, 2007 |
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The title doesn't make much sense. How did the guy get to where he is now.
(4/10)
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