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Chainplay
Author: Sys
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(Added on Sep 12, 2007)
(This month 65708 readers) (Total 88237 readers) |
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Story about chains and piercings |
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| Reviewer:
hoodedandmasked
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Sep 24, 2007 |
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Enjoyed this immensely - yes it needs polish but the underlying ideas are lovely. Thank you. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
TheVariableX
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Sep 15, 2007 |
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Some ok ideas but it just isn't a very complete story. You seem to be passionate about the subject, which is good. A bit of technical work and some more descriptions alone would rate higher. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Sep 14, 2007 |
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A shame; there is a potential story here, it just needs some grammar (such as paragraphs, for instance), some excitement, and a careful editor. Try again, please, once you've gotten the aid suggested by H Dean or elsewhere. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Sep 13, 2007 |
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I don't know what to say except that this felt as if it had been written by a 12 year old. There was no excitement and no life. It was also a technical train wreck.
Check out the "Writers Block" in the forum if you want to seriously improve. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
hoodedandmasked
(Edit) (Sep 24, 2007)
- Very harsh criticism - the story deserves better
- Replied by:
H Dean
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2007)
- No, the readers deserve better.
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| Reviewer:
steph2004ster
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Sep 13, 2007 |
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gyrl loved the idea and it made her juice. How about a similar story only nc. (7/10)
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