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Tails of a Sex Kitten
Author: DiamondBackDT
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(Added on Jun 5, 2007)
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This is a fantasy of mine that has been requested that I post. This is one of many tails between a sex kitten and her Mistress. Disclaimer: I am not much of a writer, there are mistakes so please no bashing my grammar. Enjoy :) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 6, 2010 |
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You may be not much of a writer --as you claim-- you're not much of a reader either, because after having written two words --that's two-- you already forget one: the word "place", as in "this takes PLACE in a heated pool..."
Besides, forgetting words or misspelling has nought to do with grammar, but with carelessness...
Plus, kitten must be half blind, or the pool must be huge and covered in mist, because mistress manages to stalk kitten, unbeknownst to the latter. No small feat in a backyard pool, me thinks.
True as it may be that you warned the reader of your skills, I still feel that the things that are 'wrong' about/with "Tails Of a Sex Kitten" are due --like I said-- to carelessness.
Still, the story was rather good, alas a tad short.
JJ (6/10)
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Dryhill
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Apr 25, 2010 |
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There is little wrong with the grammar, but one slight slip. At the start you say the Mistress is in the pool naked but then she takes Her bikini off!
A little more characterization would have been nice, but it would have made the story longer with no more action, so it is a close call.
Please let us have more about these two. (8/10)
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FlameDesire
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Jun 18, 2007 |
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This was a bit short, but you only wrote about the best part which is really hot!
I enjoyed the setting since most either start in the house or public places such as bars and I have yet to encounter many which takes place at a pool.
The Mistress has some nice ideas about pleasure and punishment which you really mixed up nicely.
I look forward to your writing and I hope you add another part to this soon. (8/10)
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