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A Date With Destiny
Author: demurelyours
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(Added on Apr 6, 2007)
(This month 10244 readers) (Total 24549 readers) |
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A story based very closely on fact, about a sub finally realizing her dreams and fantasy's, changing her life forever. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
chzwiz007
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Nov 20, 2011 |
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Needs better editing. The start was clunky and it could use more background to fill in the obvious questions about the characters and the situation. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 10, 2008 |
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very nicely done just wish it was longer (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Polecat
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Feb 2, 2008 |
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Nice story, if a bit short.
I'd like to see more. Very promising. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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Jun 14, 2007 |
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Great story, just needs some technical re-working and it'll be fantastic. Hope to see more in the future! (7/10)
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thomas_g50
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Jun 13, 2007 |
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I loved, and I hope this doesn't upset the author, but I laughed all the way through it. I especially love the creative way she expressed moans and groans and speaking with a gag on. Histerically creative.
I hope, demurelyyours, that continue (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
RiverOtter
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Jun 3, 2007 |
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Good action, good descriptions; lots of tension. My only suggestion is technical--using indents for the character's quotes would make it much easier to follow. It didn't detract too much though. (7/10)
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tbear4759
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Apr 23, 2007 |
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I knew just from the story description there would be spelling errors............A story based very closely on fact, about a sub finally realizing her dreams and fantasy's and I wasn't dissapointed. the author should use spell check and an editor. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
demurelyours
(Edit) (Apr 26, 2007)
- Well Bear,
I was told to thank you for your review. I am however going to ask why, with all of your spare time , do you leave those of us trying to write a good story such negative reviews. Have you written any stories? Have you peeked out of your shell and bared your soul? Hmmmm, let me check....nope! I do LOVE the reviews, and I have gotten very positive feedback and advice to improve upon my story. Thank you to ALL of you who have left me with a good taste in my mouth. I will choose to ignore the ignorant. Thank you again Bear for reminding me of all the miserable people that do exist.
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| Reviewer:
suzy9
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Apr 16, 2007 |
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i can't wait for you to continue; i've enjoyed it so far very much. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Apr 14, 2007 |
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A very well done story. I have to also agree, that I know of no sub/slave that would give themselfs to someone, sight unseen (8/10)
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mehitabela
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Apr 10, 2007 |
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well written and suspensful, i can't wait for the next chapter! i agree with snark though, i couldn't give my life to one i'd never sen. (8/10)
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Snark
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Apr 8, 2007 |
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Very well done! Nice detail, though why someone would submit so far without a visual clue strains the ability to suspend disbelief. Nevertheless the progression is interesting and the descriptions aren't cliched. A little careful editing would improve the few disconnects that the story contains. (8/10)
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dennisthmn
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Apr 8, 2007 |
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very good story. hurry with next chapter. (10/10)
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