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Julies Capture
Author: Aussie Master
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(Added on May 3, 2006)
(This month 52406 readers) (Total 69154 readers) |
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Follow Julies progress as she is captured and trained as a slave. Based somewhere in outback Austalia. To be added to over time. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (4/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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May 8, 2006 |
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I was not particularly thrilled with this tale. Rather than rehash what has been commented on, in the previous reviews, I will comment that the style of writing here is rather poor. It seems as if this was written by a teenager with little understanding on how to put together a story. I suspect that this is the authors first attempt at a story and that it was probably submitted in haste - without a proper edit. Slow down, give it a chance to settle, and go over it with a fine tooth comb before submitting future stories. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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May 6, 2006 |
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Was some of this lost? Where's the story? Seems to be just an introduction. Way too many grammar and spelling errors; with modern software, there is no excuse for this. (4/10)
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laursie
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May 4, 2006 |
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The story has promise. Has quite a few errors and too short. Clean up the errors and let the story go somewhere with a little more thought behind building the characters and maybe you might have something. Keep trying (4/10)
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mkemse
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May 4, 2006 |
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i can easily raise my rating on this if you make the story longer, spell check it and have it lead somewhere (4/10)
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kemosabe
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May 4, 2006 |
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7 misspelled words in the first paragraph! Very difficult to follow with all of the gramatical errors. Can't see this going anywhere interesting. (3/10)
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La Toya
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May 4, 2006 |
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To short to review (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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May 4, 2006 |
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040506: Suspect it is only an introduction to a full story?
Difficult to quote at this point. Reason for the neutral 5. Will review again when the next part is there. (5/10)
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