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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Mavari
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Mar 17, 2006 |
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I enjoyed the premise and the feelings were fairly real, but you definitely need a proofreader. Also it seemed to get choppy at the end which I feel was due to how you cut the paragraphs up. Still enjoyable, but you can do better than this. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
nikita
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Mar 16, 2006 |
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Pretty good story, hot, but, tsk, tsk, grammar, grammar. You need a proofreader. (7/10)
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