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Barbarian Queen - Captives of Lord Arrakur
Author: arrakur
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(Added on Mar 10, 2006)
(This month 85153 readers) (Total 117766 readers) |
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This story is based on the b-movie \"barbarian queen\" (USA 1985). it starts right in the middle of the movie (the torture scene) and trails off from that point on in the direction i would have loved to flick to go. the situation: four female warriors bend on rescuing their enslaved tribe end up in the clutches of the sadistic warlord, who holds their people in bondage. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Mothbrad
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Jan 8, 2007 |
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Firstly, I've given the story a nine, but only because it's been abandoned. The minute this story turns up again on the 'living' list, it jumps to a ten. Sure, there are issues with grammar, originality, etc, etc, but this story does what a great story should - keeps the reader interested and keeps everything moving, while providing lots of material for future fantasy! Please come back, Arrakur, and finish those poor women off! (9/10)
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darknessmonger
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May 23, 2006 |
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Lord Arrakur is definetly my kind of villian, the tortures are very interesting, and the fear, despair and hopelessness of all the victims is remarkable, please don't make us wait more for the next chapters, those prisoners have already given enough rest :)
(9/10)
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General_Dom
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May 20, 2006 |
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This is really wonderful... I'm a big fan of rack torture, but I've never seen it done quite as heinously as this! Truly ingenious. It's great how you explore the minds of the torturers as well as the tormented, making their motivations most understandable. Another thing you do well --- which I don't see enough of --- is the flaunting of your bad guy's luxurious lifestyle in the face of their victim's suffering. It just defines sadism. I love it! (9/10)
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fici
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Apr 15, 2006 |
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Very well done Arrakur!I have been eyeing all the stories in the library and reading your's I felt that I had finally found my taste.Let me tell you that I became a registered user in this site just for the sake of reviewing your story.My taste is that:-in a story,there should be plenty of bondage,plenty of pain,plenty of torture,but there should be no hardcore or gore violence like blood,etc.The feelings of the bounded person must be clearly expressed.And I must say that you have done that quite well.Especially when you explained why hitting on a woman's breasts is considered as the greatest insult.I really liked that part. Don't be dissapointed by my rating but Iam a little strict reviewer who expects very much from the author.And Iam really expecting a lot from you in your sequels.So keep up the great work! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Apr 15, 2006)
- iīm glad you like my writing. i find it always very rewarding as a reader myself, when the author meets my taste in sadistic fiction dead on.
i am not at all dissapointed by your rating...just that i would very much like to know, which elements did not meet your approval (grammar, the prose, characterization?) so i could work on improvining my writing.
thank you for taking the time reviewing the story.
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laursie
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Apr 4, 2006 |
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Very well written. You can almost feel her pain. So much detail in the torture. I can't wait to read the next chapter. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Apr 5, 2006)
- thank you for your praise, laursie.
it is my intention to make the feelings of the torturer (sadistic and sexual bliss) and the victim (agonizing pain, hopelesness, despair) as accessible as possible for the reader, when describing the action taking place between them.
itīs nice to see, that it apparently worked for you. thanks.
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Von Schmiser
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Apr 2, 2006 |
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Very fine story. The best torture scenes I have read in many moons. If not for the "mammals" referring to breasts and singing,(singeing?) and a few typos and grammar opps's a 10. Please do not stop the trials of All the females. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Apr 5, 2006)
- about the typos and grammar...yes, a problem that could be solved with a little extra care. have to say, though, that english is not my native language...so grammar errors may not be totally avoidable. thatīs not an excuse...rather an explanation.
on the other hand, thank you for your generous rating.
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Faibhar
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Mar 17, 2006 |
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It's almost as if two writers wrote parts 1&2. Evocative/derivative is no great sin, but Part 2, being so much more original than Part 1, is far superior, (and a real shame the actor portraying the "B.Q." in the flick, L. Carlson, was found murdered in r/l).
Arrakur does fine work to incorporate the film's character traits into his postings, making HIS "B.Q." all his own.
F. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Mar 22, 2006)
- thank you. i really tried to get the main character "right", so itīs nice to see that i at least partially have succeeded in that regard.
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ossa
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Mar 16, 2006 |
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Great idea, great execution, great writing. My only problem will be waiting for chapter 2. In answer to your response that is exactly what I meant (taking off on the movie). Can't wait till you fix up Barbarian 2 as well with its rack scene that had her arms in a bent and relaxed position even as she was being stretched. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Mar 15, 2006)
- well...a guy named howard c. cohen wrote the script to this movie, so itīs his idea, really.
but if you refer to the idea of writing a spin-off based on the movie....thank you. and thank you for your praise.
chapter 2 is submitted and should be online, shortly
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Mad Lews
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Mar 11, 2006 |
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Sweet damsels in distress, and promises of more to cum. Life is indeed once more worth living. I'll only give it a nine in hopes of encouraging greater ingenuity whilst tormenting the fair young captives. Make her pay for that (Oh Oh and an arena too!!) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Mar 13, 2006)
- hmmmm...greater ingenuity. hope the "payment" in chapter 2 is to your liking. so far the tortures are more "simple", yet i intend to bring in some more elaborated tortures in later installments. about the arena...i have it in the back of my mind, but i donīt want to make any promises about that just yet.
and thank you very much for the generous rating.
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kemosabe
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Mar 11, 2006 |
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Well done! Hold's your interest and I'm looking forward to the next instalment. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Mar 13, 2006)
- thanks for the kind words...hope you like chapter 2 as well
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darthsaad
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Mar 10, 2006 |
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Arrukar perfectly captures the feel of the movie [which is classic b-grade fantasy] and the characters - can't wait for the horrors that await the proud and feisy warrior beauties, especially the lioness Amathea, to be posted! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Mar 13, 2006)
- thank you, thank you. glad you like it.
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