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Average (?):  (2.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
whpike
(Edit) |
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Nov 27, 2006 |
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good idea for a story. can someone write one? seriously one or two paragraphs are not a chapter..... (1/10)
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jip
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Mar 21, 2006 |
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???????????????????? is the only comment I can give. Suspect it is only "part 1 - introduction" and that the story will follow. In that case I will review my rating.
new comments 1403: sorry but the 2 "poor" added paragraphs are not really changing a lot. (1/10)
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chksng19
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Mar 15, 2006 |
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There are such things as short-shorts. This is not one. There is one thing missing: a story! One sentence doesn't do it. Parts 2 & 3 were just a paragraph each. Little pastiches which might, multiplied by 40 MIGHT be a story. Still no where near one. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 14, 2006 |
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the layout is the worst i have ever read on any site or any story if the parts were any shorter there would be no story at all, this is simple horrific (2/10)
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H Dean
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Mar 14, 2006 |
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Why bother posting a paragraph? It's just irritating to the reader because it wastes his time.
**Edit: that was part 2 and 3? You're kidding right? One would think that, at the rate this story is being posted, it would have few grammatical flaws. Wrong. No change in my rating - still a 1. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Mar 14, 2006 |
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Were is the story?
March 14 2006- changed review from 2 to 1. Writer failed to take review/suggestions, when doing chapter 2 & 3. Again I ask... Were is the story?
(1/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Mar 10, 2006 |
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Isn't there a minimum length for submissions? (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Mar 9, 2006 |
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This fairly short introduction could do with a tad more thought put into it... This said, I also feel that there's a good story to be made out of the general idea, but it certainly needs some good thought before it is submitted.
I also hope that the "her" under the main character's desk, at the end of the intro, was supposed to be introduced in the part you forgot to post...
JJ (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
chattel69
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Mar 9, 2006 |
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I think you have a great idea it just doesn't come across in the paragraph (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Mar 8, 2006 |
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I am not sure what this was supposed to be, but a short-story it was not! (2/10)
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kemosabe
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Mar 8, 2006 |
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I must be missing something. 4 paragraphs don't make a story and this little tidbit wouldn't even add up to 500 words. Must have lost something in transmission. (4/10)
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