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When Predator Becomes Prey
Author: Deklan
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(Added on Dec 26, 2005)
(This month 14950 readers) (Total 36040 readers) |
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A chauvanistic slaver discovers what he believes to be the catch of his life, but instead turns out to be its downfall. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Ranai
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Jan 4, 2006 |
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Interesting start, promising outlook! Good work with the characterization of the protagonist through his thoughts, memories, actions. What a truly delightful candidate for a spot of capture and forced capitulation.
(Only thing that scared me was the item ‘lingerie’ in the story codes. Please don’t put it on him. Just a personal anti-fetish.)
I’m looking forward to more. :-) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Jan 2, 2006 |
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I'll split the difference. The theme is interesting, a twist to the plot is promised,all points to the posative. Some of the dialouge does seem a bit stiff but overall a good read. I'll be back for more (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Jan 2, 2006 |
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Well, I think your overall theme was good. But expressions like "I had lost count of the amount of young women I had fed to the monster between my legs" made me burst out laughing. If you were to lose the cutsey expressions and words, and tighten up your words, the story has potention. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Jan 2, 2006)
- or potential! LOL
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| Reviewer:
T38tara
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Jan 2, 2006 |
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Let him feel what it is to kneel down before a strong woman.
Please continue, the start was good. (7/10)
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