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Submission of Anjali
Author: Indian_Thrust
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(Added on Oct 1, 2005)
(This month 54945 readers) (Total 85344 readers) |
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An excerpt of the life of a poor girl who had put herself into the hands of a wealthy man, for a contract period of 2 years in return for a monthly salary which she needed desperately to pay debts for her family. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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Rating: (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
eemisso
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Aug 13, 2008 |
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Great story so far. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
masterblade
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Apr 8, 2006 |
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this is agoodstorybut,it is not sick and not of my taste like groupsex,piss,scat,tortureetc.but author works well (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 18, 2006 |
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i loved the codes and aspect of the story, but to me the storyline missed the story it is a great theme but the story missed on it's target (6/10)
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bigcat
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Jan 10, 2006 |
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Really a well written strat to what promisesto be a delightful tale. Good charcater develpment, excellent tension, good inner lives. Well done. Look for the next chapters eagerly. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
himind
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Oct 18, 2005 |
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Damn good fiction!It's wonderful to see some Indian writers getting in the mood to do some great writing,finally! It seems to be developing well. (8/10)
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slave ruthie
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Oct 6, 2005 |
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this is interesting :) i like the way you're building up the layers in this story and i'm looking forward to seeing where you take your characters. i know my own work isn't "perfect" spelling & grammar (whose is LOL) but if you could get your chapters proof read and corrected (Jinn Sir is VERY kind and allows re-writes!) i think your story would be even better! there's not enough BDSM writing from different cultures - please keep writing :) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
bee
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Oct 5, 2005 |
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I agree with General Dom. So this vote is for a promising start.. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
General_Dom
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Oct 2, 2005 |
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A promising set-up. I hope the other reviewers will take the time and revise their ratings after reading further chapters, if they like this story. As La Toya says, every story needs some background before it gets moving, and as a writer, I am very frustrated when I am penalized for doing so. It also should be noted that initial negative reviews do very little in encouraging authors to write more and, in most cases, improve the quality of their prose. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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I know a good number of friends from the part of the world, this story is based on. Only one as a name that begins with the letter "A". Having so many people with "A" names can get the reader lost.
The first chapter is the background/set-up, this was great. To many people forget this, you did not!
Now lets see were you take the story. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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Do you not know any names besides those that start with an "A"? I kept getting all the characters confused. While it had a slow build-up, I did appreciate getting background on why the girl was doing what she was doing -- some stories just leap into action and the reader is lost. Will the action pick more in the next part? (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
tiffany love
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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I hope in the second part you will get to the good stuff (4/10)
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