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Forced Happieness
Author: Dcent213
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(Added on Sep 18, 2005)
(This month 51753 readers) (Total 64960 readers) |
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Story of a workaholic girl who gets to live her dark fantasy. Depending on what feedback I get, this story can evolve quite a bit. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Oct 4, 2005 |
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To make it short, yeah, I agree with Mad Lews. Not only about the verb tenses, but the humiliation and blackmail too. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Sep 18, 2005 |
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An interesting start to a story. On the technical points you might want to stay in past tense, it's really easier to write about what has happened. You start in the present tense, which is a really difficult way to tell anything but a very short story. Just a suggestion. As far as the NC sex, humiliation, and blackmail, you've got that down just fine, keep up the good work. (7/10)
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TzA
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Sep 18, 2005 |
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I think the story is written quite good, and it has an interesting beginning. Looks promising to me, I hope you will continue writing. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dcent
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Sep 18, 2005 |
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I'm just trying to draw some extra attention. Please let me know what you think. (10/10)
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