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Lily White Neighbors
Author: Pallidan
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(Added on Aug 2, 2005)
(This month 17131 readers) (Total 31608 readers) |
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A black couple had been watching the new white neighbors since their arrival into the neighborhood. Now was the time to make them into their slaves. |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
| Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
karlwhitesub
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Sep 9, 2005 |
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Ok, there are grammatical problems but...
I get so hard, I want to be there naked with my little dick watching my wife suck and gett fucked by that big black cock!
Would get 10 if not for language... (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
jamb
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Aug 6, 2005 |
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The story (which I like but has been overused by Pallidan) is far too similar to his other works. It's not terrible, but it's not that memorable. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Woodchuck
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Aug 4, 2005 |
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I agree with rebelfan1. I think Pallidan should;
A: work harder on language mechanics, IE grammer.
B: push harder to work on followups and post more entries in things he/she has allready done, grow the story, and the writing. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 4, 2005 |
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sotra liked the story but there is a similar one to this i recently read on the site (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
rebelfan1
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Aug 4, 2005 |
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Pallidan continues to post the same plot over and over again. His/her writing and gramatical skills are below a grammer school level. Please learn how to write or find someone to edit your stories. Otherwise, stop posting them because there actually get in the way of searching for good stories. (1/10)
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