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Rendezvous With The Bitch
Author: kinkabella
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(Added on Jul 27, 2005)
(This month 79020 readers) (Total 105352 readers) |
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This story is the first part of a 5 part assigment written for a Taskmaster from the BDSM Library Academy. The instructions set for this assigment were to write a fantasy story about a sexual rendezvous with a real life person who I despise. The Bitch is just such a person and in this first part, my attempt to confront her over an affair I believed she was having with my husband backfires. It starts a bit slowly but progresses through a series of subtle blackmail scenarios before I am ultimately humiliated. |
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| Reviewer:
THE Traveller
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Sep 3, 2005 |
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This is one of the sexiest stories I've ever read. I just hope there'll be a sequel. Great descriptions, very visual.
I love female vs. female bondage. The Bitch acting cruel all the time and the main character acting like a real subbie added to the erotic atmosphere of the story. (9/10)
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submdj
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Aug 19, 2005 |
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As with most stories that a person can read, the point at which the reader is along for the ride as if participating in the plot makes me rate a story. The descriptions used in this story are well thought and equally presented.
I found a few typos and would recommend the author have someone proofread the work before posting.
I can not wait to read the conclusion of Rendezvous With The Bitch.
kudos to Kikabella. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slave802120
(Edit) (Aug 19, 2005)
- Thank you for the review, submdj. The typos will be corrected in the revision of the story.
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kinkabella
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pejanon
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Aug 18, 2005 |
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The Bitch
Talk about narrative speed. Fifteen minutes into the story and she is tied to the dildo chair. Two hours later she's performing for the group in the dungeon. So much for plausibility.
However there's another, more important plausibility. Inner one. Scenes FEEL real (within the set coordinates of the story) and they stem from the characters and are not forced on them, in literary sense of course.
Also, they flow naturally into each other, each a steeple for the next one. (No 'and now something
completely different' approach here.) I can almost surmise that the opening dialogue continues in the action scenes in some kind of obscene sign language. (Great use of the phone, bringing the husband in.)
I was certainly not happy with the ending (ch 5. Truncated and somehow stillborn.). Hover ch 6 is
almost cherry on the top. Psychologist and the pew are great! But, I still have a feeling of anticlimax, or unfulfillment al least.
Great. Thank you for sharing.
Oh, the MOST important thing: unless one's tastes run into very extreme this is one of the juicies pieces around (and covers most of the sub-genre)
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- Replied by:
slave802120
(Edit) (Aug 18, 2005)
- Hi Pejanon,
Thanks for the review. I had intended to bring the story to a conclusion at the end of Ch. 5 but changed my mind. I'm now at a point where I feel this could be a novel-length piece and I intend revising everything and rewriting it. There's already a Ch. 7 written, but I might not post that until I reset the story. Thanks again for taking the time to comment. :)
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kinkabella
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BigCat
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Aug 6, 2005 |
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Little bit of a reach with the opening gambit, but it is a fantasy. Quite erotic and well written too. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
kinkabella
(Edit) (Aug 9, 2005)
- Thank you for the review, Big Cat. It's always a pleasure to know my stories are not just read, but that they're enjoyed as well.
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| Reviewer:
kay
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Aug 3, 2005 |
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Given the parameters your taskmaster outlined, i thought you did a marvelous job of crafting a story that met that criteria. You emphasized the bitch, her despicable nature and the twisted circumstances. Yes, perhaps outrageous, but not out of the realm of possibility. By the end of chapter one, it was clear how much you loathed this woman and how powerless you were in her presence. That opened the door for the erotic humiliation that followed, which was so easy to follow. Please don't stop! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
slave802120
(Edit) (Aug 3, 2005)
- Thank you, Kay. I'm going to have to change the synopsis slightly to reflect the fact I've now written six chapters. Chapter 4 is sitting in the upload queue and the rest will follow. :)
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| Reviewer:
rilawild
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Jul 27, 2005 |
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Very good start. I like the way she got you naked and then took advantage of you; completely unbelieveable but great fantasy material. I'm looking forwards to more. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slave802120
(Edit) (Jul 27, 2005)
- Thank you both for taking the time to read my story and submit your comments. I've just uploaded Chapter 3 of this story and am currently writing Chapter 4. Expect to see them over the coming days :^)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 27, 2005 |
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need to see where you go from here, then i will adjust my rating (8/10)
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