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Taming the Neighbor
Author: Pallidan
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(Added on Jul 23, 2005)
(This month 55820 readers) (Total 73908 readers) |
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A wife dreams of submission to a dominant woman. Little did she realized it was her neighbor who now had all she needed to blackmail her into her slave. Hope to continue this. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 26, 2010 |
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A story line that has been done to death. Seventeen times the word "she" appears in one sentance, to the point it was confusing which female was being referred to. (3/10)
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rebelfan1
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Aug 4, 2005 |
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Pallidan continues to post the same plot over and over again. His/her writing and gramatical skills are below a grammer school level. Please learn how to write or find someone to edit your stories. Otherwise, stop posting them because there actually get in the way of searching for good stories. (1/10)
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mkemse
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Jul 26, 2005 |
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love the way you do most of your stories, most are conistant good, please keep up the great writing, love seeing your posts (9/10)
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makito
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Jul 26, 2005 |
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Marvelous work. I believe the author clearly understands the genre and the readers. Please continue. Thanks. (9/10)
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slave802120
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Jul 24, 2005 |
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Hello Pallidan --
I really like the idea behind your story and the thought that an online D/s relationship could be carried on by two neighbors. If I have any criticism at all, it is that you jumped too quickly to 'the action' without spending as much time as I might have liked exploring your idea more deeply.
For example, I can imagine neither of them realize they are neighbors and, to really make this believable, you could have quite a few little scenes that don't give the reader any hint of this. You might even have the two women, before they realize they're neighbors, have an online chat in which they both reveal their desires for their neighbors without revealing they are infact talking about each other. The surprise when this is finally revealed would make a really good impact and would provide a good, solid background for wherever else you decide to take the story.
Thanks for taking the time to write and share your story :)
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kinkabella (6/10)
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