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Humilation
Author: docsbabykunt
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(Added on May 20, 2005)
(This month 67227 readers) (Total 85023 readers) |
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How a shy slave is humilate by her Master. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (5/10) |
| Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
Masterdesire
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May 28, 2005 |
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I have to agree its a disaster. The writer needs to read other works and try alot harder. I saw potential but it was barely there. Would not suggest this one for avid readers. (3/10) (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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May 22, 2005 |
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I have to agree with the other reviewers comments - you need to decide your point of view, plenty of ideas, your writing will improve, most "sentences" aren't sentences.
Ludite's comment of "reading this is akin to watching a train wreck", while creating and picturesque, is a lot harsher than this deserved. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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May 21, 2005 |
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You need to decide if it's a first person story( I, this girl, etc) or told in the third person (she) . Once you make that decision stick to it for at least the entire paragraph. Plenty of good ideas, keep going and your writing will improve with practice (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 21, 2005 |
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I was sadly dissapointed by the story, when i read the storyline i was hoping it would be longer and more detailed i hope to plan to add more and more details to it as you continue it (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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May 21, 2005 |
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This one has no redeeming qualities whatsoever! Most sentences aren't sentences. It almost appears that the author is from somewhere outside the English speaking world. There is no plot, no characters. Reading this is akin to witnessing an automobile accident. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
spicym
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May 21, 2005 |
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very nice (7/10)
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