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School Become Fun
Author: sabrina
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(Added on May 4, 2005)
(This month 12170 readers) (Total 23109 readers) |
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A boy with mc become crazy after her gf ceat on her. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
GarrickBailley
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May 8, 2005 |
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I agree with the previous reviewers that more care should have been taken when editing, but I find it laughable that they would write reviews critisizing spelling and grammar when they can't even write their reviews error free. I won't name names, but in my opinion if you're going to knock somebody for having bad grammar you should try to have flawless grammar yourself in that post.
Sabrina, your story has great potential, but it read like you were going for the quickie type story that you read and orgasm quickly, then throw the story away. If that's what you're going for, then I'd say the pace was alright. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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May 7, 2005 |
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Its a good plot, but spelling errors kind of hurt the story. Correct the spelling and add to this story, you could get my rating of the story raised (5/10)
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mkemse
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May 5, 2005 |
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had great potential but it realy missses the mark, hopefully if you add more you will change that
also use spell checker before you post not after (5/10)
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chksng19
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May 5, 2005 |
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Too many wrong words, misspellings, grammar errors, etc, took me right out of the story. There is promise, but you need to slow down and rewrite the whole thing, then resubmit it. You're imaginative, now get together with and editor. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Breannefun
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May 4, 2005 |
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This story had a very interesting plot with a creative bent toward the action. I recommend some serious editing work, along with a second draft. There were numerous typos, along with major grammarical errors that distracted from the piece. Oddly enough, I think that even Microsoft Word's grammer check could do a better job. In any event, keep the ideas coming and write, write, write. Quality comes with experience. (5/10)
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melquiore
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May 4, 2005 |
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It is a nice work, look probably like a first story, but nice idea for the psychic power.. like the idea but somewhere the storie line was to short and the action to fast, but was a good storie in most part. kept going (8/10)
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CyberDragon
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May 4, 2005 |
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Psychic powers was a nice change from the norm adding a comfortable twist to the usual BDSM control scenes. The pace was too accelerated, and there were a number of typographical errors that distracted from the overall read and the ability of the reader to immerse themselves in the piece. The intro was long compared to the piece, but the story has some good premise and made for an interesting light read. (6/10)
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rce
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May 4, 2005 |
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Nice idea, but not evolved enough. The rader is pushed too fast through the story. Would probably be good if better written. (4/10)
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