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My Awakening
Author: Marilyn
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(Added on Mar 22, 2005)
(This month 9732 readers) (Total 20619 readers) |
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The story of a girl who teases her boyrfried about kinky fantiasies just trying to get a rise out of him soon discovers that she's hit a sweet spot for him as he quickly embraces one of the fantasies. She is forced to become his and must realize that she is now owned. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Delaquoi
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Nov 6, 2005 |
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Really nice. Simple and suspenseful. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Sally J
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Mar 25, 2005 |
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Really fun! Keep going... (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Mar 25, 2005 |
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Marilyn, The story was enjoyable. I think you can add chapters to expand how she need to come to grips with with now being owned. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
anguisette
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Mar 23, 2005 |
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it is a promising start, but, as sarah alluded to, the syntax was pretty horrendous. what so many people don't understand is that professionally published works have been edited so they are near-perfect technically for a reason-- the readability means that the story itself can be the main focus, not the grammar. i would love to read more installments, but only if you find a good editor before going on. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 23, 2005 |
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good start, let's see where you go from here (7/10)
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Mad Lews
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Mar 23, 2005 |
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A fine story for a first posting. Yes you could do with a bit of editing and or proof reading but all in all a good read. (7/10)
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bisarah
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Mar 23, 2005 |
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This story has good promise, the pace was good and it was sexually exciting ... at least to me. But, babe ... you need to learn what constitutes a paragraph! And you had some awkward words--you use "anus" instead of "asshole" for example. (6/10)
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