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Beatrice meets Joseph Drake
Author: John Galt
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(Added on Feb 14, 2005)
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Beatrice , working at a cafe noticed him for a long time already. This night happens something unexpected, Joseph Drake introduces her to her own needs. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 28, 2006 |
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nice beginnig, where to next (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Feb 17, 2005 |
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Great story. I hope there is more to come in the near future (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
darkpuffin
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Feb 15, 2005 |
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plausible psychology and very sexy dialogue. i didn't mind the occasional typing mistake. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
David S
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Feb 15, 2005 |
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Very good, look forward to more of the story~~~ (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
SlvTrayner
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Feb 15, 2005 |
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The spelling (evidently after some correction) and writing style were acceptable, if not great literature. The theme has promise. If the author develops the psychological side a bit more, combining desire with hesitation, the story might have more resonance. As it is, there is very little tension because the ingenue is all too ready for anything (a great thing in real life!) and that deprives the story of a certain layer of fantasy. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
John Galt
(Edit) (Feb 15, 2005)
- Thanks a lot. This short story is not really wheighted on going deeper into the characters, it would have been a lot bigger otherwise. The idea was more to inspire the imagination of the reader to think and imagine his or her own things into it.
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Humil_Slut
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Feb 15, 2005 |
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Please learn the function of spell check, there were so many errors in it, i found it impossible to read. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
John Galt
(Edit) (Feb 15, 2005)
- Sorry, that's my fault. My spelling goes out the window when I am in a writing frenzy. And I make a lot of typos. Resubmitted the story, this time spell-checked.
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