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Case Of The Missing Inmates
Author: Evil Misstress
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(Added on Feb 4, 2005)
(This month 53671 readers) (Total 70519 readers) |
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Two lady officers are to go and escort to hardened prisioners back for a trial date but things don't go as planned and they themselves are made to take their places. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 7, 2010 |
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Evil Mistress just offered us a good idea, but the writing itself is below par, I'm afraid. At least, on the technical side of things.
The story consists of a stacking of run-on sentences, which --to keep things interesting-- lack almost any kind of punctuation marks, bar full stops.
No quotation marks either. And since the dialogue is embedded within the sentences, this makes for some very awkward reading.
I feel that "The Case Of The Missing Inmates" is a nice effort. Original too. With a bit of weeding, taking a tad more care about the syntax and adding the much needed punctuation marks, this could become far better than what it is now.
JJ (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
tpdar
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Feb 19, 2005 |
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Very good start - looking forward to the continuation of the story. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 6, 2005 |
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need more story to rate it higher (7/10)
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