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Mon Evolution
Author: l'etranger
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(Added on Mar 12, 2004)
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A tale of female sexual awakening that is semi biographical, all except for the grand finale.(I wish!) |
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Weighed
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| Reviewer:
Faibhar
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Mar 21, 2004 |
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Switching P.O.V. while doing fiction is always tricky, but here it is done well as is the rest of the piece. Worthy reading for any so interested in a differing change of pace. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Mar 15, 2004 |
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A real story, with sex at the end. Pay attention to the codes, readers; l'etranger covers all the ones she lists. This story could be used as an example for how to write 'slow' stories. I'm hoping for a sequel, but this is good enough in itself. Congratulations. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
L'étranger
(Edit) (Mar 15, 2004)
- Thanks Curtis, I wasn't sure about this story as it was very real in the sense that I could get it to flow from first person. Initially I did add the R rating amongst these codes, but only after I went through codes (after submitting) I realised my error, so I'd like to thank Jinn for correcting that. This story came through easily to me, but submitting it was a B#$*$)$ due to technical reasons - pc crash etc - but I'm glad it came through okay.
once again,
thankyou.
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e.e. norcod
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Mar 14, 2004 |
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It was a slow night at the BDSMLibrary site. Most of the authors and reviewers were asleep and the only people still up were the lurkers. And the lurkers seldomn commented upon what they read.
Only a few readers had the perspecacity to understand noir fiction. The female, the male, the night, the fog, the trench coats. But we have all been there. Casablanca, The Maltese Falcon.
Reader, you must suspend belief to enter this story. But it is not a bad story. If you are willing to read it with a phony French accent. But, I am willing to see the Nazis lurking off there in the distance. Threatening.
Not a bad story. But as it developes, I want to see some proper female chastisement. Perhaps a little light torture. Perhaps a few sinister nuns holding leather strops lurking in the shadows. And, ahah, delete the female descriptive explitives. The real hard-butts have no need to use "Bitch". They have harsher ways of descibing things. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
L'étranger
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2004)
- Wow thanks! I actually didn't expect to submit this, because my pc crashed and I had to restart from the first two paragraphs, and funny you should the lurking. It was after midnight when it all kind of hit my head as to the direction and I didn't anticipate the direction.
But in choosing the 'real' setting, I thought it would be unrealistic to add in the torturous. As it progresses and more is revealed about the male character, his tastes etc more will be added.
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L'étranger
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2004)
- Wow thanks! I actually didn't expect to submit this, because my pc crashed and I had to restart from the first two paragraphs, and funny you should the lurking. It was after midnight when it all kind of hit my head as to the direction and I didn't anticipate the direction.
But in choosing the 'real' setting, I thought it would be unrealistic to add in the torturous. As it progresses and more is revealed about the male character, his tastes etc more will be added.
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