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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
johnz01us
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Jun 15, 2010 |
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Loved the story. Looking for more. (10/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 23, 2005 |
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very enjoyable story to read, need to check out NYC more often :) (8/10)
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crickette
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Jul 31, 2004 |
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Very good story. I liked the way he immediately took charged while at the same time offering her several gentlemanly chances to refuse. I thought te story provided a much needed escape for the female attorney. It was fast paced but easy to follow and very entertaiining. (7/10)
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sunburststrat
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Jun 30, 2004 |
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This story had some potent imagery. The part about "... touching the floor" and leaving a stain. Wow, that really got me! I was like right there, in the moment, at that point in the story. Hot!
I would have liked to see the author make a bigger deal about Oralia being a wife and mother, and then giving it up to this relative stranger. That could have been worked to raise the heat level considerably.
All in all, I'd like to read much more about Oralia's adventures. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Mar 30, 2004 |
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Very good and hot short story. We can't wait to read more of your work. (9/10)
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teamster
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Mar 7, 2004 |
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could've used more exposition of her thoughts and feelings. once she acquiesces things become kind of routine. (6/10)
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bdsmbill
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Mar 2, 2004 |
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Well, I liked this one more than most of the rest of the reviewers. Unlike many of them, I didn't think this was the first chapter of a longer story. It stands well on its own. Certainly another story could be written about this character, but it would not need to be a continuation of this one. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Feb 29, 2004 |
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There were a few mechanical errors that proof
reading should have caught. But the highly
charged eroticism of the story tends to make
one overlook those. My only real criticism is
that I think things moved too rapidly at times;
I would have preferred more examination of her
thoughts and feelings. But this is a relatively
minor point. Certainly, this story must have a
sequel. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Enos Quill
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Feb 27, 2004 |
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A straightforward, hot fantasy story. Almost like a stranger abduction, except totally consensual. As the two characters are opposing lawyers, I think the author missed an opportunity for some clever negotiation dialogue when he is explaining the club to her. Story needs to be fleshed out, more description -- she has already devised a great plot. I liked it, and I would love to read more of her work. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
padagat
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Feb 23, 2004 |
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keep it up (7/10)
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castle2001
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Feb 22, 2004 |
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Author should keep on writing. (7/10)
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lex ludite
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Feb 22, 2004 |
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The writing is more than adequate, a little less detail in some spots would have made it even better. Lawyers doing lawyers sounds like a win-win situation; too bad they don't switch and make it really interesting. The club scene was good, things like this do occur in certain parts of the big city. The quick acceptance by the heroine of this new life as someone's "property" is not that believable, but what the heck, this is fantasy anyway, right? This one gets a "so far, so good" mark with some reservations. I'll be sure and look in on the next installment of this one so an accurate assessment can be provided. (6/10)
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Master_chris
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Feb 22, 2004 |
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I enoyed the setip to this story, and I can't wait to see more of this story, to see how relationship builds, and to see if she moves to New York to love with he (5/10)
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Alex Bragi
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Feb 20, 2004 |
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I agree with Moggy, it’s an enjoyable read.
I like this kind of first person writing. It’s got a nice light and ‘chatty’ feel, almost as if the reader is there and being included in the story from the side. A couple of places I felt could have been ‘spiced’ up a little. e.g. “Ron produced a leather collar and collared me.” To quibble, I think most readers would have appreciated a little more detail than this.
On the super nit picky side, I would have given it a shorter title too, I think something like "New York! New York!" - like the song.
Otherwise, well done. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Moggy
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Feb 20, 2004 |
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An enjoyable short story with just the right amount of setup. I hope Ms Cruz gets enough encouragement to write something more, and perhaps longer, for this site.
(8/10)
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