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My Week of Shame
Author: Andrew
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(Added on Feb 1, 2004)
(This month 51483 readers) (Total 70517 readers) |
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A uni student in Australia is kidnapped by a female traveller, and used as a slave for a week. The story tries to deal with the mind of the slave. |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 3, 2005 |
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the story needs work, it went to fast with no substance (4/10)
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Dododecapod
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Apr 5, 2004 |
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Ideas good, but spelling and grammar checks advised. Nothing very original as yet.
Has some promise. (3/10)
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Ritualistic
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Feb 9, 2004 |
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The story line was kind of good, but a lot of the ideas seemed a bit muddled. During the part of the story that mentioned her getting video taped and that she was the only daughter, then she said she had a little sister, too many plot holes. Here's a tip, get the scene really worked out in your head first then write them down. We don't need Stephen King detail but we need some. Then remember details like is the main character an only child or has siblings, does the pain start to turn her on a bit or does the thought of death seem like a dream. I do hope you keep writing, like I said you have some great ideas and feel that as you write the story will become better. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
_sullen_rose_
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Feb 3, 2004 |
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I must say that I was disturbeb by this story. I also must remind the Author that in order to give people pleasure from reading their stories, they must include in it a partial amount of the primary content. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Feb 1, 2004 |
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Well, Moggy, from my knowledge of Masda's, the author was being overly kind to them. Anyway, I found a lot more errors than Moggy did, and they are distracting. You mention she is an "only daughter" and then, in the same paragraph, refer to her younger sister. There are also quite a few spelling errors. Don't rely completely on a spelling checker, or you end up with "reaching" instead of "retching," and "heavy" instead of "heave." If it improves as it goes along, I'll raise my rating. Don't get discouraged. Your ideas are imaginative and your writing skills are pretty good. I will look forward to more chapters. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Moggy
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Feb 1, 2004 |
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This story has made a good start using a clear, easy to read style of writing, and only a handful of errors. (Many other first-time posters fall woefully short on proofreading.)
I don't know how much 'fan' mail the author will get (as mentioned in his intro) but here's a review that says please continue.
PS to author: If you make any more criticism about Mazdas I'll deduct a point! (8/10)
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