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Tali Topless
Author: justin benedict
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(Added on Feb 1, 2004)
(This month 62224 readers) (Total 83467 readers) |
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Sequel to "Tali's Training" Fenton the Felon dominates Tali the District Attorney! |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Feb 14, 2004 |
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Fenton is so great because he abuses Tali and sleeps around with other low-lifes? I’m not buying it. There’s no enjoyment for Tali, so there’s no enjoyment for me. I couldn't understand the motivation why Tali sticks with Fenton the loser...
More detail of the frustration of the chastity corset, and more enjoyment for Tali would be improvements. Even showing that Tali enjoys the humiliation and denial would be good. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
justincbenedict
(Edit) (Feb 14, 2004)
- Bracemaiden, your objections to the story are understandable...but you must remember that I am really writing from the point of view of a malesub. This hampers me a bit...we malesubs are always fantasizing about our wives cheating on us with "lowlifes" The way my "Tali" stories have been received by men and women are so different...many men like the cuckolding aspects, and women don't as much...and one writer on another list objected because Tali wasn't screwed at the end...thank you for writing though!
Justin
Justincbenedict@yahoo.com
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Faibhar
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Feb 8, 2004 |
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Talk about a power exchange! Fenton, a.k.a. "Hot Wire" has plenty of luck with cars and ladies, and in this writer's imagination lots of depth - he's even a family man.
Be prepared, however, to take notes as this story is saturated with details of not only Tali and Fenton, but other characters and circumstances. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
justincbenedict
(Edit) (Feb 8, 2004)
- You are absolutely right about the number of characters...it's like a Thackeray novel! I got very into Fenton's character having read a lot of Donald E.Westlake..and so it's not as pure porn as most of my stuff..thanks for the great review!
justincbenedict@yahoo.com
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