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A Mistress/slave Beautiful Relationship
Author: slvWriting
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(Added on Oct 5, 2003)
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This story tries to tell what could well be everyday situations between a female Dom / male sub in a loving relationship. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
theladystouch
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Feb 21, 2008 |
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High quality writing with excellent dialogue. The story-telling is cohesive and progresses in a logical manner. Very enjoyable read. (9/10)
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mkemse
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Feb 14, 2006 |
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good story justto repetitive from similar themes, to many Mistress/slaves stories post every where (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Missy Moomoo
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Apr 27, 2004 |
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A lovely read. Very enjoyable. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
abitbent
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Oct 28, 2003 |
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I enjoyed the innocence and reality of this read. This scenario could be very typical and is probably a relationship that many sub males would die for. The part about getting fisted on the second encounter was a little bit "out there" but what they heck, it's fiction.
Good read, I recommend it. This story does support my theory though, that it's virtually impossible to write a D/s story without using the word "handiwork". It's a pet peeve of mine, and I didn't get far into the story before I found it.
Resist! Resist!
Synonyms: achievement, art, artefact, artifact, artisanship, calling, craft, craftsmanship, creation, design, invention, métier, product, production, profession, result, skill, trade, vocation, workmanship (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 28, 2003)
- Thank you for your kind review. I agree that fisting may be a little bit "out there", but it's a personal fetish of mine, so I included it anyway :-)
About the word "handiwork", I hadn't realize that what you say is so very true! I'll try to refrain from using it in any new stories I write
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| Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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Oct 27, 2003 |
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I read this story when it was first posted, and I’ve read it again just now.
To Woodsman’s game’s credit, none of the author’s style and feel has been lost in the editing. I noted none of the hot dialog has been dropped either. Oh yes, this author sure knows how to make the character’s words sizzle on the screen. Experience perhaps?
On the nit picky side, I thought some sentences were a bit cluttered. Extra words, to me anyway, don’t always mean a better read. e.g. ‘ …my last and current girlfriend, with whom I had and have a relationship of profound love.. ‘ perhaps might have read more smoothly as “my current girlfriend, who I have a profoundly loving relationship with…’ There were a few places I felt were like this, others however may disagree.
Overall its a good read, with good insight into a loving bdsm relationship. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 27, 2003)
- Thank you so much for the kind words! As for woodman's game editing, she did a really great job and I can't thank her enough for taking the time to do it.
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| Reviewer:
Emily
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Oct 12, 2003 |
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This story did generate heat and shows this writer has good promise for the future. Despite the incomplete sentences and cumbersome nature of this work I did enjoy it. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 25, 2003)
- It's been edited now, probably it can be read better now
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Oct 6, 2003 |
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Not bad really, I guess because it is a translation, the text does not flow quite right to make it more enjoyable to read. Anyway, I would not mind reading a continuation. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 8, 2003)
- Thanks for taking the time to review it. It would be great if you'd let me know particularly where it doesn't flow right so I can see if I can make it better
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