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Mine
Author: Kray
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(Added on Jun 24, 2003)
(This month 131906 readers) (Total 186037 readers) |
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A beautiful girl is abducted and brought in a far castle, where she's enslaved by a sadistic Master, that enjoys tying, torturing, raping and deeply controlling her, in a good variety of ways. Although, sometimes, he likes allowing his slave some indulgences, so that he soon succeeds in completely bent the girl to his control. Many chapters are planned. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
| Average
Rating: (5.5/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
sadie
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Sep 16, 2005 |
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I loved parts of the story thet dealt with enemas they really turn me on in real life as well. Plus it is a really well written read well worth the effert to spend and hour or two reading. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
gojack10
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Apr 9, 2004 |
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I decided to be nice and rate this story a 2 instead of the 1 it deserved. Kray, you seem a sincere enough guy, but you bit off more than you can really handle by writing in English. If I tried writing in Spanish I would probably be almost as unreadable. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
arain
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Mar 31, 2004 |
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i agree with lex totally
i tried giving this a read, and i seriouslly couldn't
it was horrible (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 15, 2004 |
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Hot, Great Wondefull, only pleae do not make it first person, to hard to folllow like this, it took me to long to read it because of the way it was done, the only thing that kept me going was the genere (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Kray
(Edit) (Jan 16, 2004)
- Thank you, Mkemse.
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| Reviewer:
veru_skjava
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Jul 20, 2003 |
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Yikes!
I realize you are writing in a second launguage. But I have to agree with the first review. I could not get past the first few paragraphs.
If it is re written with an editor, I would like to read it. Until then if it requires to much mental gymnastics to wade through, I just can't.
Good luck, the synopsis sounds promising. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Emily
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Jul 18, 2003 |
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Very disjointed at times. Kind of moves you along but to where? (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
texasmred
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Jul 1, 2003 |
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Outstanding story line and liked the detailed description of the beginning of her training. More ! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Kray
(Edit) (Jul 2, 2003)
- The second chapter has just been published, even isn't one of my preferred.
Thank you for your appreciations
Regards
Kray
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| Reviewer:
ladydragon
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Jun 29, 2003 |
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I love the idea for the story, but it is very difficult to read the way it is written. In some places I was able to understand your translation, but in others I was left wondering.<br>I enjoyed the way the Master was surprised by his lust at times and 'forgot' to torment her momentarily- and I was charmed when he insisted that she not fake her orgasm in an attempt to placate him. I was somewhat bored by her endless physical perfection- but that's a constant in many of these stories, I find, when written from a male point of view. <br>I commend you for even trying to write in a non-native language. I think you should consider having someone with good English skills help you- and I volunteer. :) (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Kray
(Edit) (Jul 2, 2003)
- Dear LadyDargon
Thank you for your deep examination of my writing.
Your attention to every little detail of my story, fills me of joy.
I think a "little" help would be suitable,
why don't you send me your E-Mail address?
Regards
Kray Kray20@lycos.com
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| Reviewer:
Detrusor
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Jun 27, 2003 |
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A good beggining, let's see the rest and judge then. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Kray
(Edit) (Jun 27, 2003)
- I will be pleased reading your comment/s of the next chapters of "Mine", whatever it/they will be.
Thank you for your kindness
Regards
Kray
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| Reviewer:
takenslv
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Jun 26, 2003 |
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Is good, but words are sometimes confusing. Is waiting for the rest of the chapters. Is this author from here. the wording sounds like they are not. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Kray
(Edit) (Jun 27, 2003)
- I'm very sorry for my weird english, but I anyway decided to write in this language, because otherwise it would be better to remain silent.
Thank you for your sympathy.
Regards
Kray
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| Reviewer:
beggitoa
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Jun 26, 2003 |
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Very well written story with great attention to detail. Look forward to more! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Kray
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2003)
- Thank you so much for your moral support, beggitoa, I really needed.
And I will surely follow your suggestion to send new writings of mine.
Regards
Kray
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| Reviewer:
johnnytoobad
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Jun 25, 2003 |
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I have to agree. The <> things realy annoy me, I gave up immediatley. Terrible story. Unreadable. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jun 24, 2003 |
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You have got to be kidding, this is awful! Protect us all from the attack of the unreadables. I'm amazed that the first reviewer managed to get past the first paragraph, I didn't! (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Sir Draconis
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Jun 24, 2003 |
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An overly long pre amble contributes nothing to the tale and appears to be
little more than a feeble effort to impress the reader.
The use of < > in lieu of quotation marks is both distracting and inappropriate.
the grammatical descriptions are so poorly written that it is nearly impossible
not to wince with each new abuse of the rules of grammar.
The tone, content, word choice, grammar and subject matter are all severely
juvenile. this appears to be a case of a barely adolescent teen having joined
or an adult who never got beyond adolesence; either way the conclusion
remains the same : DON"T WASTE YOUR TIME WITH THIS DRIVEL.
To the 'Author'(and I am being VERY generous in using that title)
Try following the rules of Grammar and punctuation and then try actually
interacting with some of the members and THEN(and only then) try writing
something worth reading. (1/10)
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- Replied by:
Kray
(Edit) (Jun 25, 2003)
- Wow !
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