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Look Into the Light
Author: Tie N Spank
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(Added on Apr 26, 2003)
(This month 48799 readers) (Total 59199 readers) |
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A woman gains control of a handsome stranger... but soon the tables are turned! |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
slvWriting
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Jan 17, 2004 |
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I really liked this story. I love stories with turnabouts, and this is one of the best on the site... why are here so few of them? :(
Didn't enjoy much about the babies thing though... (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Apr 30, 2003 |
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I agree with Terry about the need for a spell-check, but that won't change 'whole' into 'hole'. A little more care in proof-reading, please. I liked the use of second-person story telling (which is pretty new to me) and you got into both characters heads, but it seemed a little spotty...inconsistant in tone...to me. I hope you post here again. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Terry Gabriola
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Apr 27, 2003 |
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You've got it all pictured in your mind, I'm sure. But it comes across as very two-dimensional to me: the reader needs to be invited to suspend disbelief more, by giving them more handles to relate to. And use a spell-checker at least, for god's sake. A "forrest" in the opening paragraph? (5/10)
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