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The Forbidden Fruits Of My Island Fantasy
Author: kinkabella
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(Added on Jul 30, 2005)
(This month 10334 readers) (Total 18373 readers) |
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An short exploration of a personal taboo - interracial rape. There are only low levels of violence and sex and the story might appeal more to those interested in real life fantasies. I have added the "Romance" code because the whole story is, with the exception of the paragraph or two, romantic and nostalgic in nature. There is a rape, but it (hopefully) has been written about in a romantic, non-violent way. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
Engineer
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Jul 31, 2005 |
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In contrary to the previous reviewers, I very much admire the brevity and at the same time expressiveness of this story. Just the last scene, which should be the culmination, lacks some expression. Too much fatalism and too few resistance the victim's side. The end looks as if some sentences are missing. Never the less a pleasure to read. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slave802120
(Edit) (Jul 31, 2005)
- Thanks for the comments, Engineer. I suppose the lack of expression in the last scene has a lot to do with the fact I didn't want to go too far into that rape territory. Your comments are noted and appreciated and I'm encouraged by them to have another think about a better ending.
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kinkabella
- Replied by:
Engineer
(Edit) (Jul 31, 2005)
- I very much appreciate your motivation to not gu further into detail, and look forward to your next work.
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mkemse
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Jul 30, 2005 |
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the story was ok, but it needs to be longer, do not know if you plan to add to it or not (6/10)
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- Replied by:
slave802120
(Edit) (Jul 30, 2005)
- I find it really easy to write long pieces and this particular story was an exercise in brevity -- a challenge for me. As such there are no plans at this stage to rewrite it or add to it. Thanks for your review.
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Jul 30, 2005 |
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Very good writing on a sensitive topic. My only complaint is it's much to short and a incomplete thought. It almost seems like a short scene plucked out of the middle a longer story. Any chance we could get you to elaborate? (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slave802120
(Edit) (Jul 30, 2005)
- Hello and thanks for reviewing my story, Mad Lews. The piece was written as an assignment in the BDSM Library Academy - hence, the shortness. It would be my pleasure to rewrite it as a longer story.
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